From my first draft of my And Then There Were None essay to my last draft, the only thing that I really changed was my spelling and grammar errors. There was nothing huge about my essay that I felt needed changing, because I was happy with how I brainstormed my ideas before and laid them all out.
The form of support that helped me the most with my essay was showing an adult my rough draft. I feel that this helped the most because and adult has more experience with writing, and they've been around reading and writing longer then we all have. Adults can see things like spelling errors that we may not always catch, and showing my mom my essay really helped me improve my spelling and sentence structure.
The things that will help me most this year will be showing an adult my rough draft. I also think a good idea to help me would be to upload my rough draft to my blog, and have my peers comment on anything that they see I should change, or edit about my draft. I think it would be cool to get some feedback from my peers, and get their input on my writings and stories!
As a writer, the thing I want to work on most is expanding my vocabulary. This will help me tremendously with my stories, and being able to provide descriptive imagery and setting to provide my reader with a strong picture in their heads.
I hope that we can upload rough drafts to our blog, because I think that will really help all of us as writers, and help us get feedback from our peers too!
Thursday, September 18, 2014
Wednesday, September 17, 2014
The Fault In Our Stars Timed Writing Revisions
Over the summer, I read a book called The Fault in our Stars by John Green. This book is about two teenagers who are both cancer victims. They meet at a cancer support group and fall in love with each other. Their love is filled with adventure, tragedy, romance, and joy. The Fault in our Stars has one main theme throughout the book. It is: no matter who you are or what has happened to you, you can always love and be loved. This theme is supported by two main examples, which are Augustus and Hazel's romance, and Isaac and Augustus's friendship.
The first detail that supports this theme is Augustus and Hazel's romance. When Hazel is 11, she is diagnosed with cancer of the thyroid and lungs. She is now 17, is weak, has a machine to help her breathe, and she's depressed. Augustus is diagnosed with cancer in his bones and throughout his body. He beat it once before, and has lost a leg because of it, but he was cancer free at the time. Later in The Fault in our Stars, Augustus tells Hazel his cancer is back and incurable. When Augustus and Hazel first meet, it is love at first sight. They go on dates to parks, art museums, and Augustus surprised Hazel by arranging to take her to Amsterdam to meet her favorite author. These are examples of the theme, because although they are both terribly sick, they don't let that get in the way of being with each other and being happy. Despite the grave future they have, they live life to the fullest and are so happy with each other. They love each other, and they know the other loves them too. They don't let what has happened get in the way of their love.
Another detail that supports the theme is Augustus and Isaacs friendship. Isaac is diagnosed with cancer in his eyes, and gets an operation that makes him go completely blind. Augustus supports Isaac and is there for him, even though this terrible thing has happened to him. He loves Isaac and will do anything to be by his side and make him happy. Augustus takes Isaac to egg his ex girlfriend's house, because she said she couldn't be with him after he went blind. This detail supports the theme because Augustus doesn't care if Isaac is blind or care about what attitude he has towards it. Augustus loves Isaac and is willing to do anything to make him happy and enjoy life. He doesn't judge Isaac for what he looks like, he judges him for what's on the inside.
In conclusion, The Fault in our Stars has one main theme supported throughout the book. The theme is, no matter what has happened to you or who you are, you can always love and be loved. John Green displays this theme beautifully throughout the book, especially with theme examples. Augustus and Hazel, and Isaac and Augustus are perfect examples of this theme that is shown all throughout the book.
The first detail that supports this theme is Augustus and Hazel's romance. When Hazel is 11, she is diagnosed with cancer of the thyroid and lungs. She is now 17, is weak, has a machine to help her breathe, and she's depressed. Augustus is diagnosed with cancer in his bones and throughout his body. He beat it once before, and has lost a leg because of it, but he was cancer free at the time. Later in The Fault in our Stars, Augustus tells Hazel his cancer is back and incurable. When Augustus and Hazel first meet, it is love at first sight. They go on dates to parks, art museums, and Augustus surprised Hazel by arranging to take her to Amsterdam to meet her favorite author. These are examples of the theme, because although they are both terribly sick, they don't let that get in the way of being with each other and being happy. Despite the grave future they have, they live life to the fullest and are so happy with each other. They love each other, and they know the other loves them too. They don't let what has happened get in the way of their love.
Another detail that supports the theme is Augustus and Isaacs friendship. Isaac is diagnosed with cancer in his eyes, and gets an operation that makes him go completely blind. Augustus supports Isaac and is there for him, even though this terrible thing has happened to him. He loves Isaac and will do anything to be by his side and make him happy. Augustus takes Isaac to egg his ex girlfriend's house, because she said she couldn't be with him after he went blind. This detail supports the theme because Augustus doesn't care if Isaac is blind or care about what attitude he has towards it. Augustus loves Isaac and is willing to do anything to make him happy and enjoy life. He doesn't judge Isaac for what he looks like, he judges him for what's on the inside.
In conclusion, The Fault in our Stars has one main theme supported throughout the book. The theme is, no matter what has happened to you or who you are, you can always love and be loved. John Green displays this theme beautifully throughout the book, especially with theme examples. Augustus and Hazel, and Isaac and Augustus are perfect examples of this theme that is shown all throughout the book.
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